The Mysterious Accident!

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Zoey walked into the study and stared at the violin on the chair. It was exactly as he had left it, just waiting for him to come back and play it once again.

Jasper had been practicing hard for the special concert that was coming up. He was going to be playing a solo and had been so proud of himself. He had worked hard to get a place with this well known orchestra and his work had finally paid off! He had been traveling with them for a few months now, thoroughly enjoying it.

Zoey could see the sparkle in his eyes when he came home and excitedly told her how the director had commended his work and offered him the solo piece. Gabe was supposed to play it, but the director believed that Jasper would do a better job. He said that Jasper had natural talent and he could see him going far.

Sadly Jasper wouldn’t be playing at their next concert. He met with an unfortunate accident and had broken both of his arms. He was still in the hospital, Zoey had just returned from visiting him.

She felt so sorry for her brother, he had been so disappointed. What she really couldn’t understand though was how the accident happened. It seemed so strange.

Gabe had invited all the members of the orchestra over to his house for a pre-show party and while Jasper was there a heavy tile fell from the ceiling and landed on Jasper’s arms. He had been sitting directly under the tile, that Gabe said had been loose, as he apologized to Jasper.

Zoey shook her head, she had never really liked Gabe. Perhaps she would invite him over for a visit, tell him how much she wanted to hear him play the violin. He always liked his ego stroked. She thought a little more as she smiled slyly. This could be a fun visit, a fun visit indeed!

210 thoughts on “The Mysterious Accident!

  1. Zoey walked into the study and stared at the violin on the chair. It was exactly as he had left it, just waiting for him to come back and play it once again.

    Jasper had been practicing hard for the special concert that was coming up. He was going to be playing a solo and had been so proud of himself.

    Zoey could see the sparkle in his eyes when he came home and excitedly told her how the director had commended his work and offered him the solo piece.

    JR – Do you not see a glaring inconsistency in those above statements?

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  2. I have no freaking idea what’s happening in this story. Is Zoey a he or a she? Was Zoey going to play the solo piece after Jasper broke his arms, or Gabe?

    But Colin did a much better job than my tired old self can do, tackling the inconsistencies in this tale. My suggestion to fix it would be to arrange for about four more heavy tiles to fall from the ceiling, and kill all the characters. Then follow with the words, “The End.”

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  3. I had no problem with the first paragraph; it made me want to find out who “he” was, and you did a nice job keeping me in suspense until you revealed it was her brother.

    The tile ceiling reminds me of a Three Stooges episode where there is a reference to the sword of damocles – it’s one of their best…

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